Wednesday 15 April 2020

The stolen stars of Matariki new ending.

This is my new ending for the stolen stars of Matariki. It was hard to choose an ending to write about and to remember the Maori names. My favorite part was actually writing it. To be BTB, I could have said where in the book it started at.

Patupaiarehe are the fairy people of Aotearoa. They don't like sunlight; they live in woody hills. They catch stars for their cloaks.


Brainstorming

They could have used a torch to scare the patupaiarehe away
They could have delayed the patupaiarehe by hiding their agate so that they looked for it and then the sun would come up and they would leave the stars
They could ask the patupaiarehe to tell them about themselves so that they forget about the stars and then the sun would come up and they would run away
They could pretend to be stars and trick the patupaiarehe so they could lead them away from the actual stars

The actual ending

“Oh no!” Grandma said. “It’s those naughty Patupaiarehe! They’ve been stealing stars again!” Just then, they heard giggling and laughing. They slowly crawled up the stony bank and peered over. Down at the water's edge, there was a group of Patupaiarehe. They were dancing around a net with two white, glowing stones inside. Grandma gasped. “Those are the stolen stars!” she exclaimed. “Without those stars, it’ll be hard to know when it is time to stop eeling and rest for winter!” Sam and Te Rerehua gasped.  “We have to get them back!” said Te Rerehua. “But how?” whispered Sam. “Well, Patupaiathehe don’t like sunlight; it burns their delicate white skin,” Grandma said thoughtfully. “Maybe we can stall them until the sun comes up!” “Good idea, Grandma!” Sam said. “But how do we stall them?” They thought and thought until Te Rerehua exclaimed “I’ve got it; we’ll ask them to tell us about themselves! Then they’ll forget about the time and the sun will come up…” “And they’ll run away!” finished Sam. “Good idea kids!” said Grandma. So Sam and Te Rerehua crept over the stony bank and towards the Patupaiarehe. The Patupaiarehe stopped dancing and laughing as soon as the kids came close. “Wow!” Sam said loudly. “Did you catch that star?” Te Rerehua smiled. “You must be very strong to pull that down from the sky!” she said. The Patupaiarehe puffed out their chests and began boating on how strong or clever or good looking they were. They basted for so long that they didn’t notice the sun peeking over the horizon. “Oh look!” exclaimed Te Rerehua. “The sun!” The Patupaiarehe began shrieking. “Run for the hills!” they yelled to each other. Within seconds, all the Patupaiarehe were running away from the glow of the sun, and towards the hills. Grandma emerged from behind the stony bank. “Kai pai te Mahi!” she exclaimed. “You two were very brave!” “But how do we get the stars back into the sky?” pondered Sam. Grandma grinned. “I know just the thing,” she said slyly. “Pōua!” she called. “Can you throw these stars back into the sky?” Pōua grinned. He knew just what to do. He hooked his gaff onto Pohutukawa. “Stand back!” he said to Sam and Te Rerehua. Then he flung Pōhutukawa back into the sky. The star left a shimmering arc behind, then bounced into its place. Pōua did the same for Hiwa-i-te-Rangi and it too left a shimmering arc behind, then bounced back into its place. Pōua smiled. Then he began walking home with his newly caught bag of eels and their newly collected agate. They would dry nicely in the sun. It was going to be a great day.




2 comments:

  1. Wow Miro, this ending is incredible. I love all the descriptive language you have used and how you have painted a picture with your words. My favourite line was "The star left a shimmering arc behind" it really helped me to imagine Pōua throwing the stars back into the sky.
    Maybe you could do a little bit about what a Patupaiarehe is as I don't know if everyone will know.
    Keep up the amazing work, I love reading your incredible writing.

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    1. Thanks for the tip! I will change it.

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